Alright, that last comment came out harsher than I intended. Aside from pointing out the problems I would also just like to reiterate that her body proportions are pretty good (though her facial ones, like her lips and eyes are pretty unbalanced, even for a disney character) and the coloring/shady on her body is pretty good as well, although, again, the coloring on her face doesn't match up quite quality wise.
I disagree with anon1, it's definitely not 'terrible'.
Not exactly 'good' either.
I'd say it's overall kind of okay. You probably just need more practice.
Anonymous5: The thing about critiques on drawings like this is it is almost useless, because there is so much not correct from the structure, to the lighting, to the linework to the proportion.
The biggest problem is that there is no structure, which throws EVERYTHING off. Look at the fingers and knuckles for instance. They'd have to be almost paper thin to wrap around that oar. The shoulder on our left is bigger than the shoulder on our right. Her left arm (on our right) has a really long forearm. The clitoris will line up with the gracilis muscle on the inside of the leg... basically it looks like a tendon that separates the adductor and quadricep muscles. Look at reference of a woman spreading her legs and you will see what look like two tendons attaching to the top part of her vagina and they go into her legs from there. With her leg up like it is, the gracilis would be almost in the center of the leg form.
The lighting (shading) isn't all that great... you're showing light on both sides of her torso and a shadow down the center... yet according to the light on the neck, she appears to be getting lit from the upper right. You need a consistent light source.
The line thickness is rather terrible.. being fairly uniformly thick everywhere.
But again, this isn't just a "fix one thing and it's great" thing. A critique on a single image like this can't possibly turn you into a perfect artist, because there are so many things not going right here.
Best advice is to practice form first--look at Preston Blair's book on Animation to get form down pat. Practice it for months. When you start getting form right, then begin to look at value. Then look at edges.
Just don't go off and start a Patreon page and then wonder why nobody is supporting your work. Bad artists who start those and get a following don't really have any hope of improving, because they'll start getting an ego when people who have no business critiquing art fill their ear with words like "your art is fantastic!" At least you don't appear to have made that mistake.
CutesyKreepy_UncensoRED: Thank you Anon 3 & 5. We tried some new techniques that didn’t really pan out, but your critiques are good and can help us improve. Thank you for an honest critique.
Hentailicker93: @CutesyKreepy_UncensoRED: PLease some gore pic.Now that's awesome. It's really creepy and not my favorite, but plz do it. :D Maybe a dick though her head. hahaah
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Well, her proportions are actually pretty okay, but like her nose and face and the other details just look really... ugly. And smashed.
It kind of (does) looks like a child's' drawing... If a kid was drawing erotica, that is.
Alright, that last comment came out harsher than I intended. Aside from pointing out the problems I would also just like to reiterate that her body proportions are pretty good (though her facial ones, like her lips and eyes are pretty unbalanced, even for a disney character) and the coloring/shady on her body is pretty good as well, although, again, the coloring on her face doesn't match up quite quality wise.
I disagree with anon1, it's definitely not 'terrible'.
Not exactly 'good' either.
I'd say it's overall kind of okay. You probably just need more practice.
The biggest problem is that there is no structure, which throws EVERYTHING off. Look at the fingers and knuckles for instance. They'd have to be almost paper thin to wrap around that oar. The shoulder on our left is bigger than the shoulder on our right. Her left arm (on our right) has a really long forearm. The clitoris will line up with the gracilis muscle on the inside of the leg... basically it looks like a tendon that separates the adductor and quadricep muscles. Look at reference of a woman spreading her legs and you will see what look like two tendons attaching to the top part of her vagina and they go into her legs from there. With her leg up like it is, the gracilis would be almost in the center of the leg form.
The lighting (shading) isn't all that great... you're showing light on both sides of her torso and a shadow down the center... yet according to the light on the neck, she appears to be getting lit from the upper right. You need a consistent light source.
The line thickness is rather terrible.. being fairly uniformly thick everywhere.
But again, this isn't just a "fix one thing and it's great" thing. A critique on a single image like this can't possibly turn you into a perfect artist, because there are so many things not going right here.
Best advice is to practice form first--look at Preston Blair's book on Animation to get form down pat. Practice it for months. When you start getting form right, then begin to look at value. Then look at edges.
Just don't go off and start a Patreon page and then wonder why nobody is supporting your work. Bad artists who start those and get a following don't really have any hope of improving, because they'll start getting an ego when people who have no business critiquing art fill their ear with words like "your art is fantastic!" At least you don't appear to have made that mistake.
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